tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post1323355610762122898..comments2024-01-12T11:26:35.176-05:00Comments on Working Stiffs: Greenwood CemeteryWorking Stiffshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03270595837074553752noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-14951211379590207432007-04-16T17:43:00.000-04:002007-04-16T17:43:00.000-04:00Pat, this is a near perfect example of an excellen...Pat, this is a near perfect example of an excellent prologue. (Which, normally, I have a distaste for because they're often hokey, not "hooky.") But you've planted the Primary Narrative Question *and* evoked a mood *and* introduced a character made compelling by virtue of her voice and her problem.<BR/><BR/>Now...when do we see the outline for the rest??Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-69691075626438642572007-04-16T15:50:00.000-04:002007-04-16T15:50:00.000-04:00This was perfect on a day when the wind is threate...This was perfect on a day when the wind is threatening to kick in my front door. Clearly, we know how you were able to write the cold-related parts so well!<BR/><BR/>I, too, am curious about what's next!Susan Helene Gottfriedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12778191943289129869noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-43597689370928299042007-04-16T13:46:00.000-04:002007-04-16T13:46:00.000-04:00I'm so glad people find it 'hooky.' Setting the h...I'm so glad people find it 'hooky.' Setting the hook is a big problem in my completed ms. <BR/><BR/>As for what happens next... Actually, the story goes back to what happened before, before this family had to bury the handyman. An how only one of them knows -for sure- who killed him. <BR/><BR/>Thanks for all your comments<BR/>PatAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-41743460264389422007-04-16T11:18:00.000-04:002007-04-16T11:18:00.000-04:00Great opening, Pat! I can only imagine the psycho...Great opening, Pat! I can only imagine the psychological damage the narrator would have suffered (do tell, Tory). I'm hoping the book now jumps to 15 years later, when we can see how this damaged soul has evolved. Take that new-idea energy and keep writing, Pat! It's great!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-63016759024289326132007-04-16T10:56:00.000-04:002007-04-16T10:56:00.000-04:00Tory: Rent an ending? Sign me up! Sign me up!Pat: ...Tory: Rent an ending? Sign me up! Sign me up!<BR/><BR/>Pat: Good hook. I love a creepy graveyard story.<BR/><BR/>I know what you mean about fresh ideas. I spent the weekend doing research on my idea for my next book because it was nagging at me. I made myself promise not to start it until I've finished the book I'm currently working on, but it was fun to get my brain noodling on something new.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-55376391827729298052007-04-16T09:04:00.000-04:002007-04-16T09:04:00.000-04:00Pat, you've got me hooked!I understand the lure of...Pat, you've got me hooked!<BR/><BR/>I understand the lure of the new story: so fresh, uncharted, full of possibilities. Too bad there isn't some store we could go to called, "Rent an ending."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-79388358866091569572007-04-16T08:50:00.000-04:002007-04-16T08:50:00.000-04:00Oooh, nice beginning! So when do we find out what...Oooh, nice beginning! So when do we find out what happens next?Joyce Tremelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00498392016497131719noreply@blogger.com