tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post6611757324181236805..comments2024-01-12T11:26:35.176-05:00Comments on Working Stiffs: The Wrong PlaceWorking Stiffshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03270595837074553752noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-69351347390685296712009-11-13T08:27:35.366-05:002009-11-13T08:27:35.366-05:00I've written scenes before that don't ring...I've written scenes before that don't ring true. When it happened it was hard to move on and it took a while to figure it out. <br /><br />In my case it was a timing issue. The time sequence for my protagonist and antagonist were off. Once I figured out the problem, the fix was significant, but easy and it increased the suspense quite a bit.Wilfred Bereswillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03019217952304685255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-37806530439498653542009-11-12T10:14:17.222-05:002009-11-12T10:14:17.222-05:00Whew, Joyce, I thought you were going to say you s...Whew, Joyce, I thought you were going to say you solved the problem by sending your characters to the bathroom.<br /><br />I guess the question to ask is, "What's the most effective place for this to happen?" and go from there.<br /><br />I have been to some funny funerals, following by funny trips to the cemetery. However, we never found any dead bodies--other than the ones already there.Ramonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00627775403015684868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-31727987898873498102009-11-12T09:18:31.746-05:002009-11-12T09:18:31.746-05:00And JB, If I cleaned the grout more often, I proba...And JB, If I cleaned the grout more often, I probably wouldn't have to use a toothbrush on it!Joyce Tremelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00498392016497131719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-68846671482758983222009-11-12T09:15:22.733-05:002009-11-12T09:15:22.733-05:00Since you asked...
Originally I planned on one sc...Since you asked...<br /><br />Originally I planned on one scene at a funeral home, one in church, then at the cemetery. The chapter ends at the cemetery where another victim is found. (Hard to believe this is a funny book, huh?) <br /><br />Anyway, even though some of the elements in the funeral home scene worked, there was no need to split things up between the funeral home and the church--and I could make the church scene a bit more humorous. It seemed like I was drawing things out too much. So I had them skip the funeral home and go right to the church. <br /><br />Clear as mud, isn't it?Joyce Tremelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00498392016497131719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-11372330994479476362009-11-12T09:09:28.097-05:002009-11-12T09:09:28.097-05:00Cleaning was a good idea. Half of what I write, wh...Cleaning was a good idea. Half of what I write, when I do, is on the street. Usually walking down town or jogging in the park. <br /><br />I wrote a song once in an hour walking to work. I had to run in the office just to get it down.SZhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04619234741371231701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-51678557864709890822009-11-12T09:05:41.099-05:002009-11-12T09:05:41.099-05:00Interesting... I don't think I've ever had...Interesting... I don't think I've ever had this happen. Not sure I'd notice that something wasn't right if the dialogue was witty, the characters interesting, and the necessary stuff was revealed. Which makes you either a better writer than me, or obsessive-compulsive. Given the toothbrush, I'm inclined to the latter. <br /><br />Good for you, figuring it out. And I'm serious, I don't think I would have. WHY was one setting better than the other? What did one add that the other didn't? Inquiring minds - mine - want to know.Jennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01442754671445893599noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33226151.post-91809994133735778142009-11-12T07:05:20.240-05:002009-11-12T07:05:20.240-05:00Interesting post, Joyce. Now you have me thinking....Interesting post, Joyce. Now you have me thinking. And it's too early in the morning for that. <br /><br />Usually, the location for a scene seems pretty obvious, but yeah, there have been times when moving the action someplace else makes a lot of sense. Especially if all the characters are doing is talking. Move them somewhere where they can be doing something else while they're talking.Annettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02755947919433555176noreply@blogger.com